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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 is most valuable invention humans ever had and it plays an essential role in communication. A number of languages extinct each year. Some people believe that it is not essential because the world will be easier with the fewest languages. I firmly agree with the statement and would my views in the following paragraphs. In order to strengthen my perspective, I would like to assert that where globalization has given the opportunity to expand the businesses from
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country
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 to another, it has
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 become the
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 major reason behind the extinction of some minority languages because increasing demand in the corporate world of universal
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 which is why the majority of schools are teaching in English as global languages rather than native languages in term to get a better job.
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, migration
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 plays a huge role behind
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 death.
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, children of immigrants in abroad do not speak their native
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 fluently because of less preference to their own
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.
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, various languages vanish almost every year. Moving
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, fewer
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 will be easy to learn and it will unite the whole world because of ease of communication between them.
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, there will be very little
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 barrier or no barrier between them, which mean that they will be able to work in other countries and interact with them.
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, scientists will have been taking most advantage of that by sharing research on particular topics and enhancing knowledge regarding that topic from other scientists of other countries. Apart from
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, organizations will make huge profits because
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 barriers will not be a big issue for them and it will be easy for them to research on their culture and their mindsets and expand in their
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.
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, cultures and traditions of
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country
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 are directly connected to
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country
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 and cultures with vanishing itself with the extinction of
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 because there will be no
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 to preserve these cultures.
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, people will lose their identity with the death of their
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 and they will feel inferior towards other people and these people will be seen as lower value in front of native people because it will create a hierarchy in society. Adding more to
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, countries will have more dominance towards other countries who lost their languages.
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 as English is used as a primary
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 and English speaking countries are showing like America and Britain are influencing other countries. To recapitulate, it can be said that
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 issue has both the aspects having an individual value and neither of them. Can be stated wrong, but still my point of view has shown the more significant value to me.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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