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The diagram illustrates how steel rods are manufactured in furniture industry.

The diagram illustrates how steel rods are manufactured in furniture industry.
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The given process diagram provides information about steel
rods
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rod
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 manufacturing in the industry which makes furniture.
Overall
, the process
consist
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 of eleven stages, beginning with
processing
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the processing
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 of raw material and ending up with
inspection
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an inspection
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 of
end
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the end
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 product. First of all, raw materials
such
 as iron ore, yellow ore and carbon etc are mixed together in a container.
Then
,
this
 raw material mixture is subjected to
high
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a high
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 temperature of about 1300 to 1500 C for melting.
This
 molten mass is
then
 transferred to
smelting
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the smelting
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 cabin for its refinement. In the
next
 stage,
condescent
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condescend
candescent
 metal is allowed to pour into
ingot
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the ingot
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 machine. Ingot pour is
further
 attached to a cooling container and the metal is passed through nozzles to strand casting. The temperature of
metal
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the metal
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 dropped to 60-100 C at
this
 level.
Subsequently
, these
coldcstrands
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cold strands
 of metals are allowed to pass through rollers and heating
machine
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machines
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. After hearing, surface checks of these metal
rods
 are done through measuring automation. After measurement,
cutter
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the cutter
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 cut down the
rods
 to
appropriate
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the appropriate
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 size and these
standard sized
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standard-sized
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 metal
rods
 are stamped in
next
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the next
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 step.
Finally
, at the
last
 stage final inspection is done for
release
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the release
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 of
end
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the end
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 product.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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