The table below shows information and prediction regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

The table below shows information and prediction regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.
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The table illustrates the proportion of the population aged 65 or more in
Canada
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,
Germany
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and the
UK
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in 1988 and 2000 with
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predictions
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2030.
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it is clear that
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the number of elderly people in percentage increases from year to year in each country.
Canada
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and
Germany
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have generally
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a higher
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amount of elderly
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than the
UK
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. In 1988, 20.45% of Germans were aged 65 or over, compared to 16.32% of Canadians and 14.23% of British. After two years, the proportions of people aged 65 and above in
Canada
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,
Germany
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and the
UK
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rose to 20.67%, 25.32% and 14.89% respectively.
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,
elderly
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the elderly
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population of the
UK
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remained the smallest. Looking into the future, a slight increase of about a mere 5% is predicted for all
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three countries.
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, the
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of elderly people in
Canada
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and
Germany
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accounted for 26.35% and 30.42% respectively,
while
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for the
UK
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this
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number is just 20.35%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, germany, uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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