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Most people prefer ready to eat food rather than home made food now. Do you think it has more advantages or disadvantages.

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With increasing imbalance between professional and personal life at work place, many people are running short of time. Henceforth ready to eat foods is more desirable than home made foods by many people.
This
 essay will discuss about the disadvantages of consuming fast foods. Those who are having already prepared meal frequently tends to get more weight
further
 more end up in obese. Fast foods not only contain more fat, but
also
 carbohydrates in it.
That is
 not good for
health
. A survey conducted by
health
 organisations reveals that people who eat home made meal are healthier as compared to those who consume packed foods so eating fast foods regularly is increase your weight and
also
 dangerous to
health
 in the long run. Even ready to eat foods are lacking essential nutritions in it. While having packed meals we will not get a basic nutritional supplement that a balance diet is having and ready to eat foods contains preservative and added flavour which in not good for
health
. Nowadays, many master chefs and cooks are adopting ancient methods of cooking that used in our homes, which suggest that homemade foods are superior to packed meals in many ways.
Although
 packed meals have certain advantages, but
disadvanges
 supersedes it. Packed foods not only lack nutrition supplement but, dangerous to
health
also
. We should consume homemade foods in order to avoid the drawbacks of packed meals
such
 as added preservatives and artificial flavours in it. To remain fit and healthy we should prefer homemade foods over packed meals.
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