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Many people disagree with a school policy which forces children to learn new language what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is irrefutable that
language
 is an identity of every nation. A certain segment of society believes that in the learning Institutes, teachers should not force students to learn new
language
. I am family agrees with
this
 statement. I would like to explicit it of
such
 a measure.
To begin
 with, learn new
language
 would be productive for children it will provide a good knowledge to student which increase the confidence level of children. While,
school
 policies forces to adolescence to learn a new
language
 which can give stress to learners because study of
school
 is already very tough due to
this
 reason forcing to children to learn a new
language
 can distract to children from their actual
school
 study.
Hence
, in schools
this
 kind of policies are not beneficial for children.
Moreover
, forcing to learn a new
language
 can change the mood of the children to go to
school
 learner would not go to
school
 happily
then
 they cannot complete their
further
 studies only due to forcing.
Furthermore
, forcing to learn a new
language
 can become irritating to children.
As a result
, they do not like to talk to your friends and family members, which can become a major problem for parents and children
also
.
In addition
 to
this
 without interest of children to learn a
language
 they cannot give their best performance,
w
Accept space
,
hich can give disappointment them.
Thus
, they can become less confidence which has detrimental effects on their overall performance and on their studies. In conclusion,
although
 learning of a new
language
 with full dedication has fruitful results.
However
, forcing to learn a
language
 can ruin the overall performance of a student.
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