The diagram illustrate how steel rods aee manufactured in the furniture industry.

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demonstrate

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the way in which steel

rods

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are produced in the furniture industry.

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, the process

consist

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of eleven stages beginning with the raw material and

ended

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up with the inspection of

final

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product.

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, iron ore yellow ore and carbon are collected as

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raw

material

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materials

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for steel

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rods

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rod

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manufacturing.After that,the raw material is melted in a melting slit where it is heated to a temperature of about 1300-1500 C.The melted mass is

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transferred to a smelting cabin for refining.

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, the

condenscent

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condensed

metal is put in a pouring machine and poured into ingots. In the

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stage,the ingots are connected to a cooling reservoir where the operating temperature is 60-100 C.After that metal goes through nozzles and cools down.

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Further

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the metal strands are allowed to pass through rollers to alter their shape.

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, the products are inserted into a heating machine where they undergo heat treatment.

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Subsequently

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measuring automation

check

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the surface of the products.

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,metal

rods

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are provided

proper

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size by

special

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cutter.

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this

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,manufactured

rods

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get ID stamping.Eventually, the products are moved for inspection to check

any

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errors or deviations.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rods with synonyms.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

187 words

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