In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.

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In today's world, we cannot deny that technology has a private role in our lives. People use technology (to do their

works

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work

faster than past

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time but

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time, but

sometimes technology lead us a more

mistake

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) to help them to use their task faster than the past. But a controversial question that arises among people is whether we should

work

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quickly and take

risks even

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risks, even

though we do our

works

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work

mistake

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. Some people believe that speed is very fundamental in today's world, so we should do our

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work

as soon as possible. The other people think that if you accept one task you should do it correctly and it is more important than speed. I agree with the

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group because of two crucial reasons. In what follows, I will pinpoint my causes. The

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noteworthy reason is that some of the mistakes are irreparable and the companies or people should spend a lot of money or

time

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to fix the problem.

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, I think each person should do his or her

work

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correct even

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correct, even

though he or she spent plenty of

time

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on that.

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, my friend Zahra worked for a famous company in Tehran. She always is in a hurry and did her

work

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quickly without any precise. One day he

did

produced by a manufacturing process

made

a bad

mistake

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in her calculation and the company loses a lot of its investment because of her

mistake

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, my friend fired and the company spent a lot of money to compensate for the

mistake

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of her. The

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convincing reason is that in the end, we can say that the people who

work

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slower and more accurate than other people can save more

time

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A group

of scientists at Harvard University

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designs

an experiment about

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issue. They investigate two groups of people. The

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group consists of people who do more risk in comparison to the other groups. At the end of the experiment, people, who did the risk, did much more mistakes and they force to compensate for their

mistake

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, the groups who

work

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slower finished their general works sooner than the

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group. In short, all the reasons, as mentioned above, lead us to the conclusion that we should do our

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work

slowly and correctly. If we did our works correct, we will get a better result in the end.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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389 words

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In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Too much emphasis is given for education of the young. More government money should be spent to free time activitiy of young people. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some families have opted to teach their children at home. Why do you think this is? In your opinion, do you think that all children should be taught in a school environment? Say why you think home-schooling would not be a good idea and also point out some benefits for this chosen form of education.

Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views.

Nowadays parent put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is this a positive or negative development?

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?