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some people think that government spending on the restoration of old buildings in cities should be stopped. instead they should spend money for housing and road development. To what extent do you agree?

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Today
gorvernment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
governments
belives
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 in spending money on housing and road
development
 in our
society
 rather than to start restoring old buildings based on the following observations.
firstly
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Firstly
,
Accept space
,
money spent on housing and road
development enhance
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development to enhance
 good
governace
the persons (or committees or departments etc.) who make up a body for the purpose of administering something
governance
 and
infrastructural
development
 to new
government
 on board
,
Accept space
,
however
 old buildings cannot be well maintained and preserved by the
society
 to the present
government
.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
road
development
 is one of the major
infrstructures
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructures
 that develop and bind two or three
community
Suggestion
communities
 or
society
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societies
 together.They
also
 civilized our
society
 and render easy way of transporting goods faster and easily.
government
Suggestion
Government
 building housing
such
 as
estate
Suggestion
an estate
 for
community
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the community
 are changing the standard of living of the people for good in that
community
.
Thirdly
,
Accept space
,
most
nowaday
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
government
 only thinks of developing the
society
 by providing good roads and housing for
community
inorder
Suggestion
in order
 for them to make names for
themselve
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 and trying to lay good foundation for the incoming
government
 to take over
,
Accept space
,
beside their names will be
remember
Suggestion
remembered
 when and after
they
of them or themselves
their
 leaves the
government
 sit.
conclusively
Suggestion
Conclusively
,
Accept space
,
government
 should always put the
community
 needs
first
,
Accept space
,
however they
Accept comma addition
however, they
 should try to delight and render good
governace
the persons (or committees or departments etc.) who make up a body for the purpose of administering something
governance
 by providing good roads and housing for the
community
 that elected them in power so that their names will not be put to shame after their
government
.
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