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Should parents be obliged to immunize thier children against childhood diseases? Or do individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

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The issue of whether we should force parents to immunise their children against common diseases is, in my opinion, a social rather than a medical question. Since we are free to choose what we expose our bodies to in the way of food, drink, or religion for that matter, why should the question of medical “treatment” be any different? Medical researchers and governments are primarily interested in overall statistics and trends
and in money saving
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and money saving
 schemes which fail to take into consideration the individual’s concerns and rights. While
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 against diseases
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 as tetanus and whooping cough may be effective, little information is released about the harmful effects of vaccinations which can sometimes result in stunted growth or even death. The body is designed to resist disease and to create its own natural immunity through contact with that disease. So when children are given artificial immunity, we create a vulnerable society which is entirely dependent on
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. In the event that mass
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 programmes were to cease, the society as a whole would be more at risk than ever before.
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addition, there
 is the issue of the rights of the individual. As members of a
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society, why
 should we be obliged to subject our children to
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 potentially harmful practice? Some people may
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 be against
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 on religious grounds and their needs must
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 be considered. For these reasons I feel strongly that
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 programmes should not be obligatory and that the individual should have the right to choose whether or not to participate.
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