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Nowadays newspapers publish information about the private lives of individuals. Some people think the government should maintain certain control over the information that gets published, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Before the advent of present day technology, newspapers have played a major role in community awareness and knowledge dispersion.It's true from time to time, media houses publish stories without masking the subject's identity raising privacy concerns.Governments have press act enforcements in place which some believe must be stringent while others support giving free hand to mass communication.We will discuss both the aspects in the following paragraphs. Newspapers are the medium through which people receive ideas and shape their perceptions regarding state
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public figures and common headline topics. Having a tighter control on the press would filter out the authenticity and importance of the issue published. It will
also
 lead to a closed economy wherein people are exposed to customize propaganda and hoax news.It is widely believed that freedom
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 the press is path to
development
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develop
 and wider transparency. There has been misuse of these channels to target someone or escalate negative intentions. Uncontrolled leakage of information
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has caused
 public outrage and unrest
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tarnished public image and have pinned innocents in
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the past
.There have been incidents of people
commiting
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
committing
 suicide or absconding due to their identity reveal in public domain.It may
also
 affect diplomatic and highly secretive defence strategies of a nation. I believe newspapers are an important instrument in global economy building and should not be fully
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controlled, but
 it's true they are a double edged sword and to strike the right balance is the need of
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the hour
. Governments should stipulate certain conditions which the publication house should follow and ensure there is no breach or unethical practices followed.

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