At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In the current situation, the population of those several countries has a higher
number
of middle
age
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aged
people than the elderly people. In my opinion,
this
situation
is has
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has
has had
more advantages when
compare
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compared
to than disadvantages. Which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraph. On the one hand, the main benefit of having
significant
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a significant number
number
of
younger adult population
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the younger adult population
is always wealth for the nation. They directly or indirectly support for the
countrie’s
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
countries’
economic growth.
Moreover
, other developed countries come forward for a business deal and invest on in our land, because man power is the main resource to start any business, in particularly
for
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in
production industry
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the production industry
.
Also
, they are big supporting hands
for
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of
the older people to
taken
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have taken
care and giving moral support for their rest of the life.
For example
, if a car company
want
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wants
to build
production centre
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a production centre
in any of
neighbouring country
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the neighbouring country
a neighbouring country
neighbouring countries
.
Firstly
, they will look for the human resource availability. Even though, they have provided with space and power to build a production area, the main priority which they like to consider is man power. Which is one of the great pillars
for
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of
the nation.
On the other hand
, the only drawback of having
large
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a large number
large numbers
number
of younger
adult
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adults
is that, due to the excess human resource there is an increase in unemployment percentage.
Moreover
,
government
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the government
cannot provide job opportunity for every citizen. Based on the potential and capability individuals must choose their own path.
For example
, government employment exchanges are flooded with
substantial
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a substantial number
number
of job applications, but the opportunity of securing job is very less. In conclusion, having large
number
of younger adult population in
countr
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the country
a country
y is more advantages and less disadvantages
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
  • instability
  • healthcare
  • elderly care
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