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Some people think that the only way to be successful in business is to have a unique product. Discuss if you agree or disagree

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There are people who believe that to achieve in
business
 at a better place, should have a
trade mark
a distinctive characteristic or attribute
trademark
 of any one
product
. I agree with the statement (View point, above notion etc..).
This
 essay will
first
 discuss the role of unique
product
 to get
huge number
Suggestion
a huge number
 of customers and
secondly
 will highlight grade of the
product
 in a good
quality
 if it concentrates on the single
product
To begin
 with, if we maintain a single
product
 will have a good customer connect to achieve
successful
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success
 in
business
. As
this
 helps to
setting
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set
 up an
identification
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identical
 as
this
product
 would be available at any time in the shop and
also
 registering in
customer mind
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the customer's mind
customer's mind
a customer's mind
 when they think about the
product
 to pop up the retailer name as a trade mark.
For example
, Babies diapers Pampers is the known company which has a unique
product
 of pampering. Adding
further
,
this
 would be available in any medical or a
retailer
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retail
shops
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shop
 as a bulk or some sample pieces as a cost effective
Furthermore
,
quality
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the quality
 of the
product
 will maintain as a top grade when having a unique
product
.
Quality
 measures could bring up when doing a
quality
 check and address any issues quickly with minimal changes or cost. Apart from
this
, while maintaining a
quality
,
this
 would obviously achieve the goal and bring more revenue to
business
Suggestion
the business
.
For example
, pamper
product
 very soft in nature and would not harm to toddlers skin even they use more than 12hrs of time and it
dose
mature female of mammals of which the male is called 'buck'
does
 not wet clothes or any leakages would be
comfort
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comfortable
 for them it would not uneasy to wear for
long time
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a long time
. In conclusion, I believe that owing to have a unique
product
 i
n mark
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the market
markets
a market
et leads to sustain in the
business
 and continue to provide good
quality
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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