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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today

#exploration #development #alternatives #fuels #priority
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The research, investigation and usage of an alternative of crude oil and its by-products is considered to be given the most important
world
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 attention nowadays. In my opinion, I agree that exploration and research on alternatives to fossil fuels should be a targeted goal for the
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 because it will solve many problems and reduce quite a good number of environmental issues. It is obvious that
efforts
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the efforts
 made by the human being to explore and advance their
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
 have
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 caused major problems
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 as water, air and environmental pollution. An excessive amount of carbon dioxide released into the atmosphere has dramatically affected the ozone layer, which is supposed to protect human habitat. The fossil fuel is damaging the environment
in
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at
 an unbelievable pace and many
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 leaders have already agreed that the use of fossil fuels should be controlled to save the environment. Now the question
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arises, how
 much importance it should get? As it is related to the very existence of the mother planet – Earth, and a global problem, without any doubt it should be given a global priority. If not, after few
decades it
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decades, it
 would be too late to control the catastrophic consequences. To urgently tackle
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 problem,
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 leaders from different countries should sit together and agree to policies that all countries in the
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 would follow.
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 meeting should be done as soon as possible. It is
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 important that some major safe alternatives like solar power, biogas, green energy etc.
should
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Should
 be widely used and the government should encourage people to use it.
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, the climate issue involves all nations of the
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 and the fatal effects will affect the every single of them.
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 why it is imperative that global attention and sponsorship are given by the governments of different countries and international bodies to conduct the research, to invent a safe alternative to the fossil fuel immediately. In conclusion, it is very important that governments of numerous countries set aside a robust financial plan and policy paralleled to the exploration of green energy in order to combat anticipated problem that may arise
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • safe alternatives
  • global priority
  • limitations
  • drawbacks
  • potential benefits
  • government
  • international cooperation
  • investing
  • research and development
  • challenges
  • obstacles
  • transitioning
  • individuals
  • businesses
  • adopting
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