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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating to the environment, population and education as well . What problems will your country face in the next 10 years? How can these problems be overcome

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IN THE PRESENT TIME, EACH AND EVERY NATIO EXPERIENCING SOME OF PROBLEM
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 AS GLOBAL WARMING, OVER OR DECLINE LIFE EXPECTANCY RATE, ESPECIALLY IN THE DEVELOPING COUNTRY LIKE INDIA WHERE PEOPLE ARE NOT INFORMED OR AWARE OF THE ESSENTIALNESS OF THE BASIC KNOWLEDGE.
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 ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE INCREASED LIFE EXPECTANCY RATE IN INDIA IN
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 10 YEARS AND
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, STATE THAT HOW THE AWARENESS IN THE PUBLIC CAN ABLE TO SOLVE THE MENACE TO SOME EXTENT. ON THE ISSUE SIDE, THE MAJOR PROBLEM IN MY TERRITORY WOULD BE A POPULATION. AS THERE IS A BANN IN THE ABORTION AND NO FAMILY PLANNING AMONG THE COUPLE LEADS TO THE SITUATION WHERE THEY HAVE TO ACCEPT THE PREGNANCY AND GIVE BIRTH TO THE CHILD.
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, LESS NUMBER OF EDUCATED CIVILIAN IN THE DEVELOPING COUNTRIES.
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, BIRTH RATE REPORT OF THE INDIA REVEALED THAT 80% BABIES ARE THE RESULT OF LACK OF DESCEDANT PLANNING AND AWARENESS. ON THE SOLUTION SIDE, THE NECESSARY STEP IS TO TACKLE
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 MENACE IS THAT PUBLIC SHOULD BE KNOWLEDGABLE ABOUT HOW TO CONTROL THE GENERATION EXPANSION AND NEED TO FOLLOW THE NUCLEAR GENERATION PATTERN.
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 COULD BE ACHIEVED BY ARRANGING AWARENESS PROGRAM BY THE GOVERNMENT.
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 MAKE CITIZENS AWAKE OF THE CONSEQUENCIES OF HAVING TOO MANY CHILD IN THE GENERATION AND
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, SMALL FAMILY DECLINED THE BURDEN OF BREEDING AND NUTURING COST.
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, BRITAN FAMALIES SURVEY SHOWN THAT THEY ARE HAPPY AND LIVING PIECEFUL LIFE AS THEY OWNS A NUCLEAR FAMILY.
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 THE OVER POPULATION CAN BE REDUCED BY MIGRATING TO OTHER EXPANDING NATIONS LIKE CANADA, NEWZELAND.
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 MAKE THAT COUNTRY MORE ECONOMICALLY STABLE. IN CONCUSION, AS PER THE NATURE'S LAW, NO ONE IS FREE FROM ALL THE PROBLEM EVEN A COUNTRIES HAVE TO FACE
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 SITUATIONS ON WHICH THEY DO NOT HAVE ANY ONTROL.
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, IF GOVERNMENT AND INDIVIDUAL WORK AS A TEAM THN SURELY, THEY CAN FIGHT WITH ANY ISSUE. IN CONCLUSION,
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