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Modern cultures around the world have become similar as compared to the past. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Culture
 means the idea, customs and social behaviour of a particular
society
. It is directly related
with
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to
 civilization. Social traditions, conviction of the
people both
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people, both
 religious and moral
also affect
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also affects
 the cultural values. In that
sense we
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sense, we
 can say that good
culture
 can
gives
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give
 birth of a knowledge based
society
.
Culture
 has changed in a variety of ways over the passage of time. Technological advancement plays a crucial role for transformation of cultural norms from one generation to another. It is a continuous process indeed. Modern
culture
 is a changing version of the ancient
culture
. If we closely look at the cultural deviation of different
society
 we can see that the cultural gap of various societies around the
world
 has been reduced gradually after 1950’s. It has changed its shape and monoculture has been evolved. The main reason behind
this
 transformation is globalization which makes the communication of different societies easier than ever. The advent of new electrical equipment as well as availability of
computer
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a computer
computers
 with fast internet facilities make it more convenient and bring the
world
 at one’s fist. Like many other things in the
world
 modern homogeneous
culture
 does not have unmixed blessings rather it has
also
 some negative development which we cannot ignore. If we examine the positive
development we
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development, we
 can see that it helps a person to think himself as a global citizen rather than a member of a small
society
. When a student goes to a foreign country for study purpose and if he can combine the positive elements of two different
culture
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cultures
 it would a competitive advantage of his whole career.
Similarly
 a person who is in touch
of
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with
 different
culture
 can improve his horizon of knowledge in
broad perspective
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a broad perspective
the broad perspective
 and can use it for the better of his country. We everybody knows that big invention comes by broad mentality and it cannot be
build
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built
 up without assimilation of different
culture
.
On the other
hand globalization
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hand, globalization
 makes
culture
 of different small
society
 obsolete and putting them down in peril of extinction. Many different cultures have already been disappeared due to fierce competition with the developed
culture
. Homogeneity of
culture
 weakens the strength of identity of individuals and
society
.
Although
 cultural homogeneity or monoculture is beneficial for overall development of the
world
, cultural diversity is
also
 necessary because it related to the biodiversity of a particular locality. In that sense we have to find out a better combination of both conceptions to defend the cultural diversity through promotion of cultural minorities as wel

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