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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

#internet #books #air #tickets #groceries
Modern people are much interested to buy their everyday goods and commodities through online shopping. The ease
in
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of
 accessibility of items and the less human effort makes
people
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peoples'
peoples
 interest towards online shopping.
Eventhough
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Even though
, some of the people face challenges in payment gateway when they go
for
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to
 internet banking are
preffering
like better; value more highly
preferring
 online marketing.
This
 essay will argue that
advantages
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the advantages
 of
this
outweight
be heavier than
outweigh
outweighs
outweighed
 the disadvantages. The greatest
benifit
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
 of buying goods online is the ease of comparing the product among different sellers
such
 that one can go for better which takes more time to enquire manually.
For example
, if we compare the fare of flight tickets
of
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for
 different
air line
a hose that carries air under pressure
airline
 provides, definitely there will be
marginal difference
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a marginal difference
marginal differences
 across their prices because of the availability and the services they rendered inside the flight.
Therefore
, online marketing allows us to go for a better product and
also
 saves our time. The main challenge that most of the people are facing security issues while paying for the products through internet banking.
For instance
, while paying for the products they may use their credit card or debit card. By installing proper firewalls, payments can be done in a secured manner. On balance, online shopping makes more comfortable which
alot
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a lot
 of human effort and time clearly
outweight
be heavier than
outweigh
outweighed
outweighs
 the disadvantage
by
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of
 installing suitable security softwares.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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