Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand?

Most people agree that modern life encountered us the request for more cuisine. I believe there are three main
problem
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problems
associated with
this
obsessive demand, and
also
three remedies we can adopt. Perhaps the major
problem
we need to deal with is the most of the people in worldwide are
become
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becoming
more affluent every day.
This
inevitably leads people to consume every single product they desire. A
second
issue is that
this
is completely
unavoidable we
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unavoidable, we
are living in a fertile
era so
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era, so
we could plant and harvest more that our ancient.
This
circumstance may cause soil erosion and future people will come across lack of crop yields.
As
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At
the same as
this
we may hunt more than earlier time.
Finally
, there is so many
advertisement
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advertisements
which leads us to consumerism –
for
example when
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example, when
I turn on
TV
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the TV
that present me with many
product
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products
which tempted me to consume. Turning to possible solutions, one key to step would be NGOS should inform people about the problems we may
encountered
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encounter
like lack of fauna and so many animals will be endangered by excessive hunting them for our meal. To tackle the
problem
of too much hunting we should legislate more strictly to control how many fauna could be hunted every year they could,
for instance
, give every slaughterhouse some tickets for one year and according to that they can’t hunt more animals.
as
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At
As
the same as
this
the state should make regulation for the farmers about how
many
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much
time they can plant and harvest every year. To remedy
final situation
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the final situation
the government should make laws for food advertisement and prevent gimmick advertisement. To sum up,
this
problem
has both social and natural effects, and the solution will require combined action by the mammon and NGOS.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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