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Some people think that lawbreakers should be sent to prison. However, others think that better talents among those should be made to work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many people believe criminals should be sentenced to prison while others think it is better for offenders to do unpaid works. In my opinion, I totally agree with the latter approach. There is no doubt that stiff sentence has
deterrent effect
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a deterrent effect
 on either prospective offenders or habitual offenders. Imprisonment means that people will lose their freedom and its life is like a zombie which is
inacceptable
not adequate to give satisfaction
unacceptable
 for a normal person. What’s worse, the criminal record has a bad influence on their lasting life including their careers.
In addition
, other citizens always have a preference
on
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for
 them.
Therefore
, people will not break the law. The supporters of letting criminals work with on profit
believes
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believe
 that
this
 opportunity not only bring them reasonable
punishment but
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punishment, but
also
 make them a great citizen because of acquiring job skills. If offenders are sentenced only to prison, they are likely
reoffending
offending against or breaking a law or rule
offending
 after being released due to insufficient working experience, which can
also
 pose a threat to other members in the society.
Also
, doing some jobs like a volunteer
also
 facilitate the economic growth. From my point of view, it is worth noting that some juvenile criminals or
first
-time offenders broke the rules since lack of relative knowledge or low
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 status. In
this
 circumstance, it is unfair for them to sacrifice their freedom to punish their minor crimes so community service is the best punishment among imprisonment or penalty.
However
, for the safety of
inhabitants
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the inhabitants
, habitual offenders should have serious sentences.

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