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Some people say smoking should be banned on public places. To what extent do u agree or disagree?

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Active and Smoking are injurious
for
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to
 health of a person. Some people
believes
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believe
 that smoking
on
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in
 public areas should be restricted. I strongly favour
this
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 idea of prohibiting it as it pollute the surroundings.
Firstly
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, smoking in public place is not suitable space to do as it
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 other people. It is high time that
government
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the government
 should prohibit the smoking by implementing some laws and fines to the common citizens so that it would serve a lesson for others as well.
In addition
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, a person
who is smoker
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who is a smoker
 and smokes
everywhere but
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everywhere, but
 never think that he is creating difficulties for others. As passive smoking is a big issue in the century rather than active one. Take an example, if
husband
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a husband
the husband
 is consuming
ciagerret
finely ground tobacco wrapped in paper; for smoking
cigarette
 in front of his
wife
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wife, then
then
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 it will cause more to her
instead
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 of him.
Secondly
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, by prohibiting it government can reduce the problem of pollution in the
air which
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air, which
 is because of smoking at public premises. Smoking invites diseases like asthma, breathing which is due to poor quality of air that a person inhales through his/her lungs.
On the contrary
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, banning
Use synonyms
smoke
Suggestion
smoking
 can be
problem
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problematic
 for those who are addicted to it.There should be some area in which
smoke
Use synonyms
 can be allowed for those who cannot survive without it.
For instance
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, in
developed
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developing
 nations
,
Accept space
,
authorities
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the authorities
has given
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have given
separate place
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a separate place
 to the smokers to
smoke
Use synonyms
. To conclude, smoking in public premises should be restricted by government. I think it is important for everyone that they should not
smoke
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at
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in
 public buildings as active smoking is directly related to the passive which cause huge damage to the passive smoker rather than active one.
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