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People have different opinions on how they should spend their money. While some people believe that we should spend our money to enjoy life, others argue that we should save it for future. I agree with the latter point of view.

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There are people who believe that
life
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 is supposed to be enjoyable and full of happiness. In their opinion, if you just work hard to save more
money
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 for your
future
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, you will not be able to enjoy your
life
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. No one, after all, gets a
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life
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 to enjoy the goodies they give up in their quest to save more and more.
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 argument certainly sounds convincing;
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, there is another side to it. I have absolutely no issues with people who believe that
life
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 should be enjoyed to the fullest. But in order to enjoy
life
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, we
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 need to be prepared to handle its ups and downs. It is almost impossible to predict what will happen in the
future
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.
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, a critical illness, an accident or a loss of job can land us in serious trouble and derail the course of our
life
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. If we spend all our
money
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 to enjoy our current
life
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, we will not be able to deal with these situations. To conclude,
life
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 is full of surprises and it is impossible to predict what will happen tomorrow.
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, we need to be prepared and the most practical way of doing
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 is to save
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 for the
future
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.
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 does not mean that we should not spend
money
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 at all. What we need to do is to strike a balance between our need for enjoyment and the need to secure our
future
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.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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