Some parents believe that children need strict rules. Other parents believe children should have a lot of freedom to make decisions on their own. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Parents play an important role

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development

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the development

of their children. Some parents believe children need strict

rules whereas

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rules, whereas

others believe the need for

freedom

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to make decisions. These beliefs play critical role

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the development of children. Children nowadays, tend to have more

freedom

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than their predecessors, and

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has led to

more premature sexual conception

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the more premature sexual conception

, drugs and alcohol abuses, smoking and other variety of problems. Due to the significant increase in these problems, I believe that parents should have stricter rules. These problems

has negatively affected

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have negatively affected

our society and is increasing day by day due to more

freedom

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to make choices. A recently published article by

World Bank which

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the World Bank, which

the World Bank which

had specifically researched on

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topic found that, the percentage of children associated

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with

any one kind of abuse among alcohol, drugs, smoking, sex

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were

70% higher compared to the stats of same survey conducted in 2010.

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represents a growing problem and needs to be tackled.

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, the local rehabilitation

center

an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centre

, here in

kathmandu

the capital and largest city of Nepal

Kathmandu

has seen

unprecedented number

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an unprecedented number

unprecedented numbers

of teenage children in recent years.

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, to curb these problems, parents should implement stricter rules on their children. It is

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important

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for

children to learn to make decisions and to understand

freedom

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. Being able to express their desire, creativity and art would lead to

development

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the development

of children.

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in turn would lead to children beings able to make decision more wisely based on their own personal experiences.

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, considering both the positive and negative aspects of

freedom

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of choices and stricter rules, it appears that to tackle current problems faced by society due to

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children, stricter rules should be implemented by parents.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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