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Human activity have negative effect on plant animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything. Some people believe that effective act be taken to improve this solution. Discuss both views and your opinion

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From one side of the
issue it
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issue, it
 has been argued that human activity has already had a negative impact on not only plants but
also
 animal
species
. To elaborate, those who
is
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are
 in favour of the
opinion
 that
This
, in their
opinion
, is because many
species
 of plants and animals have already disappeared from our world and it is impossible to get them back.
For example
, in 2013, a United Nations study found out that several
species
 disappeared from our ecosystem because of deforestation.
This
 clearly shows the depth of the bad effects that our activities have on the wildlife. So, in these people’s
opinion nothing
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opinion, nothing
 can be done to reverse the problem. Meanwhile, there are many of those who put more value on to take proper actions to get improved with a variety of solutions.
those
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Those
 who
is
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are
have been
 in favour of the
opinion
 that governments around the world must come together to address the issue of deforestation.
This
 is because it is the main cause of the disappearance of endangered
species
.
For example
, the South African government outlawed deforestation in 2015 and since
then
 the results have been impressive as many
species
 have been saved from extinction
Moreover
, those tending toward the
second
opinion
also argue
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also arguing
 that especially those living in urban areas is in need of reducing the use of electricity. To illustrate, the use of electricity can be seen as the main and most important cause of the reason why plant and animal
species
 is affected. A well-known example of
this
 issue took place in Antarctica, the south of
island
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the island
, millions of polar bears has been lost and even currently on the verge of extinction.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • **Biodiversity**: The variety of plant and animal life in a particular habitat.
  • **Conservation**: The action of conserving something, in this case, the environment and wildlife.
  • **Extinct/Extinction**: When a species no longer exists anywhere on Earth.
  • **Ecosystem**: A biological community of interacting organisms and their physical environment.
  • **Habitat Destruction**: The process by which natural habitat becomes incapable of supporting its native species.
  • **Sustainable Practices**: Methods of using resources that do not deplete them or cause long-term environmental harm.
  • **Endangered Species**: Species at risk of extinction.
  • **Ecosystem Restoration**: The process of assisting the recovery of an ecosystem that has been degraded or destroyed.
  • **Global Collaboration**: Countries working together towards a common goal.
  • **Environmental Awareness**: The understanding and knowledge of environmental issues.
  • **Pollution**: The presence in or introduction into the environment of a substance which has harmful or poisonous effects.
  • **Carbon Footprint**: The amount of carbon dioxide emissions for which an individual or organization is responsible.
  • **Climate Change**: Long-term alteration of temperature and typical weather patterns in a place.
  • **Reforestation**: The process of replanting an area with trees.
  • **Sustainability**: Meeting our own needs without compromising the ability of future generations to meet their own needs.
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