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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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These 2 maps illustrate the transformation of an airport in the following year.
Overall
, the airport will be expanded. The most noticeable change will be witnessed by the terminal with the erection of gates,
while
 the main building will be added more facilities. At present, there is a concourse with 8 gates and a walkway connecting from the airport lounge passing gates 1,2, and 3. In the main building, the
departure
 area, check-in (verb missing)
on
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is on
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 the
left hand
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left-hand
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side
,
whereas
 a cafe is on the top right-hand corner, near the security control.
In contrast
, there are no services
on
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for
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 arrivals
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and departure
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departure
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departures
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.
On the other hand
, in the future, the terminal is going to extend to 2 wings and the walkway is going to transform
to
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into
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 a sky train which will connect the passenger lounge and 2 concourses. In the main building, the entrance will be expanded twice as much as before. In the
departure
 area, a lounge will have more shops where the passengers can buy duty-free. The cafe will be relocated to the other
side
 of the
departure
 area, which will be on the left-hand
side
 near the entrance, to make room for
check in
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check-in
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. The old check-in counter will be replaced by the backdrop. In the arrivals
departure
, There will be an
annex
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 on the bottom right-hand corner for car hire. A cafe and ATM will be added on the right-hand
side
 of the
departure
. Strikingly, security, passport control and customs remain intact.
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coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, it is crucial to ensure that the essay is well-organized with clear paragraphing. Each paragraph should contain a clear main idea, supported with relevant information. Linking words should be used correctly to guide the reader through the arguments. Try to avoid run-on sentences and ensure that each sentence logically follows from the one before it.
task achievement
Regarding task achievement, ensure to fully address the prompt. This entails a complete and thorough comparison between the two maps. Ensure you cover all key features. Expansion in content is required to exhibit a comprehensive understanding of the visual information provided. Development of ideas can be deepened with additional details or explanation where appropriate.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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