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‘Tourism is always a force for good which enables people of different countries to understand each other.’ To what extent do you agree with this idea?

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The role of
tourism
 in the world today is widely debated, with some people claiming that it is
indeed
Suggestion
Indeed
 a force for international understanding.
However
, I personally do not entirely accept
this
, and I will explain why in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, we must consider the potential negatives of contact between cultures.
For example
,
when
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When
 western tourists visit untouched parts of the world, their stay causes pollution for local
societies
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
Societies
. We see
this
 in the litter left at Machu Picchu in Peru, and in the damage to ecology caused by safari
tourism
 in Africa.
Furthermore
, there are numerous examples of tension between tourists and local cultures, ranging from drunken British tourists in Europe to American ‘spring breakers’ in Canadian or Latin American resorts. In these cases,
tourism
 actually leads to resentment and distrust between nationalities, not better understanding. A
further
 reason to be wary of
this
 idea is the economic aspect. It is sometimes said that
tourism
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Tourism
 improves international relations because it encourages the flow of money from wealthy to less developed countries. In reality,
however
, the wealth generated usually stays in the hands of private companies or local officials, and rarely drips down into the population. Many of us have visited less developed nations as tourists, and have witnessed at
first
 hand the poverty that exists outside the confines of the resort hotels. We leave with the impression that our stay has contributed nothing to the lives of those we have observed.
This
 is not to say that
tourism
 is entirely bad, of course. There are benefits in terms of
improving
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Improving
 local infrastructure
such
 as roads and airports. But to say that it is ‘always a force for
good
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Good
’ is to ignore the various problems it causes.
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