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University should accept equal number of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#university #students
Nowadays, studying in
university
 increasingly popular which have many subjects
for
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to
 their students. Same
number
 of male and female
student
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students
 need to be accepted by
university
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the university
universities
a university
.
This
 essay will discuss why accepting students based on their interest
is
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are
 entirely necessary, despite any
gender
.
University
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The university
 should give
same
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the same number
number
 of
admission
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admissions
 to
boy
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boys
a boy
the boy
 and girl in every
subject
. Female and male have
same
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the same opportunity
opportunity
 to
growth
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grow
 in their life so equal
number
 of students show the equality of society.
For example
, in the past, some
university
 gave chance to female students and they are now working as a scientist as like as
male
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a male
. Female in society might be contribute as male if universities are going to give
opportunity
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an opportunity
 in
subject
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the subject
.
In contrast
,
number
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the number
a number
 of
university
student
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students
 should not be same by
gender
 in every
subject
. Admission process of
university
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a university
depend
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depends
 upon talented students not any particular
gender
. Male and female students have not same interest in
subject
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the subject
a subject
.
For example
, some talented male students
not get
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don't get
aren't getting
chance
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a chance
 to study any particular courses because of seat reserved for female
student
. Admission process based on talent so that it might be not affect talented
student
. In conclusion, students have more
opportunity
 to study in
university
 compared to
past
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the past
.
This
 essay
will discussed
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will discuss
 why universities give
same
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the same opportunity
opportunity
 to male and female students in every
subject
. In my opinion, talented students will get
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to study in universities rather depend upon any particular
gender
.

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