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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views about how governments should measure their countries’
progress
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. While economic growth is, of course, essential, I agree with those who believe that other measures of
progress
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 are just as necessary. There
are key three
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are three key
 reasons why economic development is seen as a fundamental goal for countries.
Firstly
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, a healthy economy
results
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result
 in job creation, a high level of employment, and better salaries for all citizens.
Secondly
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, economic growth ensures that more money is available for governments to spend on infrastructure and public services.
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, a government with higher revenues can invest in the country’s transport network, its education system and its hospitals.
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, a strong economy can help a country’s standing on the global stage, in terms of its political influence and trading power.
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, I would argue that various other forms of
progress
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 are just as significant as the economic factors mentioned above.
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, we should consider the area of social justice, human rights, equality and democracy itself.
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 a treatment of minority groups is often seen as the reflection of moral standards and level of development of a society. Perhaps another critical consideration when judging the
progress
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 of a modern country should be how well that country protects the natural environment, and whether it is moving towards environmental sustainability. Alternatively, the success of a country could be measured by looking at the health, well-being and happiness of its residents. In conclusion, the economy is a vital marker of
country’s success
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the country’s success
a country’s success
, but social, health and environmental criteria is equally important.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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