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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

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 It is argued that
plastic
 bags should banned because of the problems they create to the environment.
This
 essay agrees with the statement because
plastic
 bags do not degrade and end up as litter in cities.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
 must be banned. The main environmental side effect related to
plastic
 bag is that they pollute both land and soil.
some
Suggestion
Some
 people may reuse or
recycle but
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recycle, but
 most ultimately litter or throw them in
thrash
Suggestion
the trash
the thrash
. If they are thrown in the trash,
plastic
 bags will wind up in ever-increasing number of
land fills
a low area that has been filled in
landfills
 and contribute to soil pollution. The ones that are simply tossed on the street clog drains in cities eventually find their way to the sea and entangle marine life. The increasing use of
plastic
 bags results in an increase of
plastic
 waste which is hard to dispose of. Because
plastic
 is non degradable
substance it
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substance, it
 does not become one with the soil.
Moreover
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Moreover, plastic
plastic
 bags cannot even be disposed of by burning as on burning, it produces poisonous gases that can cause serious diseases.
Therefore
plastic
 bags disposing
have become
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has become
 a bid challenge today. In conclusion,
plastic
 bags that form a major part of environmental pollution must be banned.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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