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Band 7.5

The responsibility for the environment rests with the individual and not only with the government. Do you agree?

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It is obvious that not only the state must look after the nature, but
also
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 each person should take care of it. I completely agree with
this
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 statement, because without having healthy surrounding
such
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 as fresh
air
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 and
water
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, it will be quite difficult to live in
this
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 world, and only with co-operative work of the authorities and their citizens
this
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 goal may be achieved.
To begin
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 with the idea of preserving
air
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 from
pollution
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, it should be highlighted that a vast majority of governments around the world have commenced a wide range of green programs, which are set up in order to minimise the detrimental effects of carbon dioxides and other harmful gases to the oxygen.
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, if citizens do not tend to assist the government in overcoming
this
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 issue, it will be approximately impossible to achieve of preserving
air
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 unpolluted.
For instance
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, only when will an individual switch using his or her car which is oil consuming to a car with a solar battery, green programs
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 as reducing an activity of steel manufacturing and other related companies which are dangerous for the environment will have a greater impact.
Moreover
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, there is another
pollution
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 problem related to
water
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 contamination, which
also
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 need to be considered by the state as well as by their people. It is clear that using
water
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 plays an essential role in our daily lives.
Besides
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 reducing the
air
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pollution
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, many states give a precise attention to decreasing
water
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 contamination. Like with
air
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pollution
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, there is
also
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 an undeniable responsibility of an individual to preserve
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 source of the nature.
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, if a person pay more attention to reducing wastage of
water
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 and not throwing into it any rubbish, it would be easier to protect
water
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 reserves from contamination. To conclude,
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 the states have a significant impact on preserving
water
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 and
air
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 unpolluted by setting up green programs,
this
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 goal cannot be achieved without dedication of their citizens in terms of reducing
water
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 wastage and changing driving habits to less harmful one.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • responsibility
  • environment
  • individual
  • government
  • protect
  • solve
  • issues
  • collective action
  • impact
  • choices
  • habits
  • contribute
  • degradation
  • education
  • awareness
  • promoting
  • policies
  • regulations
  • support
  • enforce
  • collaboration
  • necessary
  • effective
  • protection
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