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The tradition that the family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts?

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Spending quality
time
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 with the family is always imperative. Lately,
usual custom
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the usual custom
 of all the family members eating together is vanishing for various reasons.
This
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 essay illustrates few reasons, on why family members are not eating together and
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 explains potential repercussions. It’s undeniable fact that, The current world is extremely challenging and people need to slog and
strive
lack of agreement or harmony
strife
 at
work
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, to cope up with raging competition.
However
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, it’s
also
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 equally prominent to maintain perfect
work
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 life balance. Employees should realize that their earnings are for well being of the family and well being include, having a quality
time
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 together. People currently are obsessed with money and
work
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,
incessantly
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incessant
 spending long hours at
work
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 by sidelining the family. Long working hours
is
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are
 the primary reason for the people not being able to meet the rest of the family for supper. If
a
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an
 Individual is
not able
worthy of notice
notable
 to a spend quality
time
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 with spouse and children, it’s going to cost them a relationship. Children at home, will be eagerly waiting for parents to come home on
time
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 and take them to
Park
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the Park
 or Play areas. Parents are naturally obligated to keep the children entertained during their free
time
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, which is evening. If Parents are snubbing
this
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 commitment of not playing with children or not joining them for supper, children will eventually develop their dislike towards the parents. Divorces are quite common
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
, since the couples are not able to spend loving
time
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 with family. In my opinion, Family comes prior to anything else and every Individual is responsible to make some
time
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 for family and target to join other family members, at least for dinner
everyday
Suggestion
every day
.
This
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 essay
thus
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 discussed possible reasons for family not spending
time
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 together their meals and explained about catastrophic consequences.

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