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Why local people do not visit the historical site and museums. Discuss the reasons and give a solution to this problem.

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There is no doubt that ancient buildings are the backbone of nation that represent the rich culture and diversity of any country.It is uprising issue in
today
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today's
todays
 world, the native people of historical city rarely goes to museums
beacsue
for the reason that; on account of
because
to
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of
 their daily schedule and they do not give much preference to historical places.
This
 essay will explain the main causes and solution of
problem
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the problem
problems
a problem
To begin
 with, Ancient sites always attract foreign people from different cities and countries by past
,
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,
culture and speciality. People from other nations always want to
visit
 these kinds of
places but
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places, but
its
it is
it's
 totally opposite to the native people they try to deny the importance of old buildings because they already know about them from books and their parents so they
dont
do not
don't
 show much
intrust
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in trust
. A study shows that natives of Agra city rarely
visit
 The Taj Mahal.
Furthermore
, there is
plethora
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a plethora
 of solutions that overcome
this
 problem. By aware the local people regarding the rich culture of their cities and buildings that encourage them to
visit
such
 places and
also
 make them more
resposible
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
 to save the wealth of their city and country.A study shows that people of
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
pays
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pay
 more attention regarding the security of ancient buildings than before. To conclude
,
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,
due to
busy scheduel
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the busy schedule
busy schedule
 of native people they
dont
do not
don't
 like to
visit
 their local old buildings
also
 they know everything about that
buildings
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building
 so
thay
people in general
they
dont
do not
don't
 feel need to
visit
.
but
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But
 these reasons never overcome the importance of ancient
sities
the piece of land on which something is located (or is to be located)
sites
cities
 for foreigners and people of other cities.
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