Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere.

Some argue that the states provide financial support to the talented artists, while others say that funding artists is a waste of
money
and that should be
spend
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spent
somewhere else.
Although
artists lack funds to showcase their talent, I believe that the
government
should spend
money
on constructing better roadways as it will benefit all people. On the one hand, the
government
provides
aids
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aid
to
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for
various
artist
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artists
because they do not have sufficient
money
to set up exhibitions.
That is
to say, as novices they do not receive any financial support from the private sector nor they are rich enough to fund themselves.
Thus
, by receiving monetary help from the
government
they are able to showcase their talent and progress
further
in life.
For instance
, the famous Indian artist, M.F. Hussain belonged to
poor family
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a poor family
and was not able to showcase his talent to the world, but later with the financial support from the
government he
Accept comma addition
government, he
not only progressed
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hasn't only progressed
but became one of the best artists of the world.
However
, I believe that artists may misuse the received
money
to fulfil their personal needs.
On the other hand
, the
government
invest
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invests
these funds for the betterment of its citizens by maintaining and building better roads.
In other words
, it is
people's
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the people's money
money
which is collected in the form of tax, and it should receive the benefits of it. By investing
this
money
in roads people can travel comfortably from one place to another. To illustrate, a recent survey by The Times of India revealed that 45% of people feel that their
money
should be utilized in maintaining better roads as they have to travel on a daily basis. I believe
this
school of thought is preferable to me because as it will benefit the masses and not an individual. In conclusion, despite the fact that the
government
assists various artists as they have
shortage
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a shortage
of funds to exhibit, spending
money
on them is a waste and it should be used for the betterment of the public by building new roads.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government patronage
  • cultural heritage
  • national identity
  • creative industries
  • unnecessary expense
  • essential services
  • democratize
  • private patronage
  • market forces
  • innovation
  • boost tourism
  • subjective nature
  • allocated ineffectively
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