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Some people believe that children should not be given homework everyday, while others believe that they must get homework everyday in order to be successful at school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #children #homework #school
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Education is the backbone of every person's life. Certain mankinds understand that pupils should give
homework
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 for practice,
however
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 others oppose on it. I will discuss both view and give my opinion.
Initially
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, there are various factors, why teachers should give
homework
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 to pupils. The main cause is practice. If students will do academically at
home
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, it is ideal for
remember
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remembering
 everything regarding
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study
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the study
. Which is better for
exam
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the exam
exams
an exam
. They will not take
stress
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the stress
 near
a
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an
 exam. Pupils can get desire scores. Another reason is mind setup, because children do
study
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 at school, but at
home
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 they waste time for playing games
ans
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 watching tv.
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 they are not ready for doing
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study
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the study
.
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, they will lack in education as well as will not complete their goals, which set in their minds.
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 but not least, there is some problem to give
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 at
home
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. The
mani
most important element
main
 threat is freedom, which loss
childen
a young person of either sex
children
 in their life, since they spend 6 to 7 hours for
eduction
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
.
Accept space
.
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doiog
a member of the genus Canis (probably descended from the common wolf) that has been domesticated by man since prehistoric times; occurs in many breeds
dog
dough
big
 tuition burden on
thier
of them or themselves
their
 mind. In conclusion,
although
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 giving
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 is pressure for pupils
,
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,
but
it
it is
it's
 part of
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study
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the study
a study
. Limited
homework
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give
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gives
 to learners.
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, they attach with
study
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 and do some enjoyable activities at
home
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.
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