Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Before talking about the essential role of the death

penalty

, you have to think about the meaning, and the purpose, of any kind of

punishment

. If you consider that the purpose is to prevent the guilty from being nasty again, you can be seduced by an argumentation in favour of the suppression of capital

punishment

. But you have to think about another aspect of the problem: a

punishment

also

useful to impress people, to make them fear the law. In fact, let’s take the example of a young misfit, which has grown in a violent atmosphere, influenced by older delinquents, etc. He lives in the streets; he’s got no aim but to survive.

This

is the kind of person who could possibly kill someone for money, or even for fun. Why would he fear prison? Life would be easier for him there.

In addition

, in many cases, when you behave normally, you can benefit from

penalty

reductions.

This

young misfit needs to be impressed; he needs to know that the law is a frontier. When you cross it, you can lose your life.

That is

why capital

punishment

helps keep a distance between robbery and murder. If you abolish it, you suppress the difference between these two types of crime, which are completely different.But there is

also

a limit to define: even if the death

penalty

is unavoidable, it would be a crime to apply it to inadequate cases. If there is no premeditation or past facts which can justify

such

punishment

, it is far too strict to apply the death

penalty

That is

why the lawmakers have to establish precisely the context in which capital

punishment

car being pronounced.

That is

the price to pay to limit violence without using excessive violence.

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2Word repetition
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2 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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