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Demand of food is increasing worlwide. What are the causes of this? What measures can the international community take to make sure the food supply is enough?

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Food
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 is essential for the survival of human beings as well as animals, birds and all living organisms. In recent years, the
demand
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 for
food
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 is increasing worldwide. With regards to increasing
demand
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 for
food
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, in
this
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 writing we will discuss the possible causes for
this
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increase
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 and possible solutions to address
this
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demand
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. One of the causes for the surge in
demand
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 for
food
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 is the growing human
population
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.
Human
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The human population
population
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 has reached
unprecedented number
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an unprecedented number
unprecedented numbers
 in the current years. Currently, the global human
population
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 is about 8 billion.
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, for the survival of human
population
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,
demand
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 for
food
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 has grown.
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 to the
population
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 growth of humans,
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 factor that has contributed to the
demand
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 for
food
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 is lack of household
agriculture
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 practices. People from older generation used to have kitchen garden or small farms near home to produce crops and
food
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. Now, with the ever-busy city life, people have left
such
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 farm practices which
has led
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have led
 to increased dependency on
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 for
food
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,
thus
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 increasing the
demand
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 for
food
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. To address the growing
demand
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 for
food
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,
international community
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the international community
 could employ better
agriculture
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 and farm practices to
increase
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 the production of
agriculture
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 and foods.
This
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 would directly lead to
increase
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 in
food
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.
Further
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, improvement in
agriculture
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 processing is needed to
increase
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 the production of
food
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 from raw
agriculture
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 products. Another possible solution could be changing people’s habit of
food
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 consumption. As,
recently
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recent
 World Bank report on
food
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 states that almost 35% of human
population
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 are obese, whereas 20% of
global
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the global population
population
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 have malnutrition.
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, people should be encouraged to have
right amount
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the right amount
 of
food
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. These possible solutions could help address the growing
demand
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food
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 worldwide.

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