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It is important to teach children to protect the environment as it is to teach them to read and write . To what extent do you agree with this statement ? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experiences .

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Nowsaday
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teaching
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Teaching
 children to
precevie
to become aware of through the senses
perceive
 the
inviroment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 is valid and beneficial issue. As educate them to write and read. In
this
assay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 I will explain the important value of
this concepts
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these concepts
this concept
.
First
 the responsibility of learning children to
prectect
shield from danger, injury, destruction, or damage
protect
 our
inviroment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 depend on both family and community.
First
 Imagine the world if all families feel responsible to teach their sibling who to clean the beaches or garden
,
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 public outdoor, not misuse any government facilities It will help because
this young
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this, young
these young
 children in the future will be adult and if their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 is addressed that mean stunning and helpful future
to
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of
 our countries.
Second
 families should be
good example
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a good example
good examples
 to their kids like
parent
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a parent
 can be participated in one society or group whose caring to keep our
environment
 is healthy and clean and share their children in
this
 group
.
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 In
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 view the
school
 should give lessons about keeping
environment
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the environment
 clean and the benefit of
this
 value should
them
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
 the hazards and disadvantages of bad
environment
, the teacher can encourage student to plant.
and
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And
 give
practical lesson
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practical lessons
a practical lesson
 about that.
However
 Planting and agriculture
are
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is
 important to healthy
environment
also
school
 can do championships about how to keep our
environment
 is clean I think children like seeds if you caring them at the present day
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tommorow
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Tomorrow
Tommorow
 they will be strong skeleton of our community
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 I remember when I was in primary
school
 how my teacher teach us
abut
on the topic of
about
 the value of gardening and
effect
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the effect
 that ton our
environment
 at that day all student was starting to plant roses and seeds
infront
 our
school
 and at the end of
month
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the month
.
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our
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Our
school
become
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has become
becomes
is becoming
fascinating and wonderful view
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a fascinating and wonderful view
.
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 We feel that we make amazing pictures
to
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of
 our
environment
 and gave message that even
small thing
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a small thing
 can help to keep
environment
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the environment
 clean and safe
.
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 Inclusion I feel we need both government and.
Familiy
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Family
 to cooperative to learn children about important
environment
 and I am sure I we will get
fantasist
 results.
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