Scientist agree that many people are eating too much junk food and it is damaging their health. Some people think that these problem can be solved by educating people to eat less junk food. Other people believe that education will not work. Discuss both vies and give your opinion.

People who
eating
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eat
are eating
too much
junk
food
, they suffer from
serious
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serious health problems
a serious health problem
health
problem
. Some people believe that
education
solved
junk
food
related
problem
,
However
,
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,
other think
education
is not
solution
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the solution
a solution
of the
problem
.
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essay will discuss that
education
have
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has
some limitation but why it can solved
junk
food
related
problem
. Many people believe that eating more
junk
food
problematic for
health
that can be solved by
education
. Proper
education
proved that benefit of eating
junk
food
and how much
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
in
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on
our
health
.
For example
, educated people eat
food
as per their schedule.
In addition
, eating
food
based on requirement of calories per day. For
these
denotes a person or thing
this
reason people believe that
education
can solved
junk
food
and its
health
issue.
In contrast
,
education
not aware
to
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of
eating more
junk
food
and causes of it. Some educated people have only theoretical knowledge about
education
.
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example well
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example, well
educated people who pass out from top tier university are
also
eating too much
junk
food
and suffer from
serious
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serious problems
a serious problem
problem
. For these
reason
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reasons
some people think
you
of you or yourself
your
education
is not solved
health
problem
which occur through
junk
food
. Serious
health
problem
due to eating too much
junk
food
proved by scientist.
This
essay discussed
education
can
solved
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solve
health
related
problem
occurred through eating more
junk
food
. In my opinion,
education
shows the people to causes of eating too much
junk
food
.

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