Some people think that the Government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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An increasing number of people opine that the public authority is spending much resources on the creative side and that
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money should be allocated to various other sectors of development. I completely disagree with
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view as art is an indispensable and inseparable part of a country's culture and
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
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act as a source of income to the authority.
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, a country stands out from another in terms of its culture and heritage. It is the field of arts that bolster traditions
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. As
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allocating money for the artistic field is never a
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waste, but
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the backbone
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representing nation
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the representing nation
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the world. It is through
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spectrum, a country is known and cherished. Many small countries are highly remarkable through their cultural values and traditions.
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, Bali is a tiny nation, but it is known to the world due to its rich heritage and seasonal festivals. With that being said, artistic field generates a high source of income by attracting tourists across the globe
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An increasing number of tourists choose
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destinations, mainly
depending on the cultural background and scenic beauty. By spending money on art promotes and advances the spectrum, thereby gaining a huge number of tourists which in turn adds to the government's revenue.
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,
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Dubai is widely known for its skyscrapers and artificial parks, the percent of sight seers
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less as compared to tourists in Oman which is known for its cultural backdrop. In essence, art has always been a magical entity that adds vibrant
colors
a flag that shows its nationality
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to the society's development and for its inmates emotional development.
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Thus spending
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Thus, spending
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the arts
is never a
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failure, but
is a form of preserving culture reflecting a society's beliefs and values.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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