Some people think that the Government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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An increasing number of people opine that the public authority is spending much resources on the creative side and that

this

money should be allocated to various other sectors of development. I completely disagree with

this

view as art is an indispensable and inseparable part of a country's culture and

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

act as a source of income to the authority.

Firstly

, a country stands out from another in terms of its culture and heritage. It is the field of arts that bolster traditions

unshiveringly

. As

such

allocating money for the artistic field is never a

waste but

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waste, but

backbone

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the backbone

representing nation

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the representing nation

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the world. It is through

this

spectrum, a country is known and cherished. Many small countries are highly remarkable through their cultural values and traditions.

For example

, Bali is a tiny nation, but it is known to the world due to its rich heritage and seasonal festivals. With that being said, artistic field generates a high source of income by attracting tourists across the globe

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An increasing number of tourists choose

destinations mainly

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destinations, mainly

depending on the cultural background and scenic beauty. By spending money on art promotes and advances the spectrum, thereby gaining a huge number of tourists which in turn adds to the government's revenue.

For instance

although

Dubai is widely known for its skyscrapers and artificial parks, the percent of sight seers

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are

less as compared to tourists in Oman which is known for its cultural backdrop. In essence, art has always been a magical entity that adds vibrant

colors

a flag that shows its nationality

colours

to the society's development and for its inmates emotional development.

Thus spending

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Thus, spending

energy on

arts

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the arts

is never a

failure but

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failure, but

is a form of preserving culture reflecting a society's beliefs and values.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

enriching society
promoting cultural understanding
development of talent
creative industries
economic benefits
generate revenue
cultural heritage
identity
prioritize spending
needs of the majority

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Some people think that the Government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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