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With an increasing overweight population some people think universities should make sport a compulsory module on all degree courses. To what extent do you agree?.

#population #people #universities #sport #module #courses
In today's modern
era there
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era, there
 is a high rate of
obesity
.
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.
 In my opinion the most effective method in developing and improving
health
 is considered to be daily
exercise
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exercise, however
however
 some people think that universities should make sport a main subject on all
graduation
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graduate
 courses. On the one hand people with increasing overweight is facing many
health
 issues, I agree that exercise is a key to
health
 and a proper nutritional diet is very important to keep oneself fit.. Junk foods
are now become
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are now becoming
have now become
 a fashion in today's era eating
excess amount
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excess amounts
an excess amount
 of improper food is a major cause of
obesity
.
On the other hand
 people think universities should make
a
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an
 important subject as sports on all degree courses. Many people believe that by
this
 many students will focus on
there
of them or themselves
their
health
 and maintain a proper diet and involved in many sports activities which is good for the nation as well. But in my
opinion I
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opinion, I
 feel that
this
 cause the major effect on
there
of them or themselves
their
 studies and students will focus mainly on sports rather than academics. They are different ways to get through
this
obesity
 as
For
instance China
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instance, China
 is considered to have
increased amount
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an increased amount
increased amounts
 of people with
obesity
 and has banned the coke and other drinks to avoid it. To conclude many people across the world is facing the
overwight
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweight
oversight
 problems.
however they
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However, they
However they
 are many countries in which government has open
an
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a
 fitness
centres
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centre
 and banned the junk foods to come across
this problems
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this problem
these problems
.. At
last
 exercise is the major key to be fit.
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