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Today our life is changing rapidly and affects family relationships. Does advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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Introduction
Now a days people are very busy with their office work and their personal work. Even they do not have enough
time
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 to spend with family.
Body paragraph 1
But was 20 to 25 years before its totally
a
Suggestion
an
 opposite by the
time
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 peoples have much
time
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 to spend with the
familes
a social unit living together
families
.
Body paragraph 2
Linking Words
However recent
Accept comma addition
However, recent
 days men or women we run like
machine
Suggestion
a machine
machines
 to yearn money and
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 our needs.
This
Linking Words
 may become richer you by
money but
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money, but
 not my our family relationship. Spend
time
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 along with family any one meal of the day to have along with family.
Body paragraph 3
Corporate culture have
interface
Suggestion
an interface
interfaces
 to our culture husband and wife both are working so they do not have
time
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 to take care of the children's. For a child they need love and affection. Parents should teach them good things and bad things once they came home from school parents should must talk about the day what are all the things happen and all so that the family relationship built and everyone will be happy.
Body paragraph 4
Prons
Suggestion
Prince
Browns
 of
this
Linking Words
concerpt
an abstract or general idea inferred or derived from specific instances
concept
concert
 is that
only thing
Suggestion
the only thing
 is my opinion we make much money to save for our children future as a parent we give them good education like school and University.
Body paragraph 5
Corns is that here there
is
Suggestion
are
 no love and affection if the wife working in day shift husband working
in
Suggestion
at
 night so here there is no even small amount of
time
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 to spend with each other.
Conclusion
My opinion is that spend
time
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 with family
atleast
Suggestion
at least
 some
time
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 with
them talk
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them, talk
 about something so that
time
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 each and every of the family feels some good things.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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