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Changing jobs and residences frequently is a very common scenario nowdays. Do you believe that this is good for one's future?

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Change
 seems to be the mood these days, in politics, economics, society, even personal life.Confirming the global tide of
change
, we shift our residencies, preferably moving from worse to better domiciles, and switch jobs for better pay and benefits. Some argue that keeping our lifestyle endangers our personal safety and personal stability. I
also
 believe that despite the need for it only whenever the end result is
fruitfil
productive or conducive to producing in abundance
fruitful
frightful
fretful
, frequently forced
changed
Suggestion
changes
change
to change
 is ailing more rather than helping. It is important that the idea of development is carefully distinguished from all arbitrary
change
. What is noticeable recently that the craze for abolishing all
that is
 old for any
that is
 new is rampant. In the job market,
also
,
empoloye
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
 seem to be more restless, less patient
of
Suggestion
with
 the due process of career progression. They fail, commonly to appreciate bureaucratic inertia that serves as a professional's nine-lives and misunderstand it as
obstacle
Suggestion
an obstacle
 toward promotion.
As a
result employers
Accept comma addition
result, employers
 are
also
 becoming cynical of employees' commitment.
This
Suggestion
Thus
, as a whole, destabilizes the job market, which is favourable neither for the enterprise nor for the entrepreneurs and staffs. We are
also
 facing
this
 lack of commitments in residential communities. Before, a family would move into a
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
, socialize and localize themselves intimately for years, sometimes generations may develop a sense of mutual
trustability
 with the local.Now, because of rampant migration from one locality to another, people are becoming strangers in their own alley.
As a result
, community support is diminishing every day, especially in urban areas, and families are transforming to estranged groups of people in an
otherwise
- crowded landscape.
Change
 is good, as long as it is circumspect
.
Accept space
.
change
Suggestion
Change
 is bad, whenever it is done just for the sake of it.
Therefore
, we must check the frequency of
change
, while keeping our minds open, and remember that all that we may perceive as old and used are
also
 that we have to lose, which may very well be all that we have.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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