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In many countries, students take a year gap after finishing school and work or travel during this period. Should students take a gap year before attending universities? What are the advantages and disadvantages of it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In recent days, it is quite common for young adults having a break
time
 after graduating from secondary school. It is not the case of rich people choosing
travelling
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to travel
 as a destination while poor young adults prefer to
work
 in spite of entering university for a period of
time
. I personally believe that there will be a number of positives and drawbacks in both cases. The reasons for
this
 issue may involve the recognition of restricting knowledge and experiences in entering university studies,
comparison
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compared
 with deciding to
work
 or take a journey which will give a broader view of
life
. The young adult will be better
on
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with
 the resources of the personal
life
 because
for
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in
 both cases are able to develop them as the independent people. Students deciding
work
 or explore the beauty of
world
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the world
 definitely gain some practical experiences and recognise the meaning of
life
 rather than spending much
time
 with some papers or plenty of assignments.
On the other hand
, the disadvantages of both
cases perhaps
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cases, perhaps
 make people not interested again in continuing their study. They may end their study because of enjoying their daily
life
.
Moreover
, they may face some problems in adapting
academic environment
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the academic environment
 after spending a lot of
time
 in
work field
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the work field
 or adventures.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
 probably think that it is better to pursue a career
in particular
 jobs or do something different which can make
this
life
 full of colours in spite of studying in university.
However
, it will be less of people deciding break because to obtain a better future academic qualification as a primary of requirements. In conclusion, having off
time
 for young adults after graduating secondary school is not a wrong decision. They may argue that spending
time
 for gaining greater experiences is one way to enjoy
this
life
 before coming
to
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into
 the environment which has many differences from the previous study.
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