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some people think that art is an essential subject for school while others think it is a waste of time. discuss both side and give your opinion.

Art
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 subjects need to be conducted in the schools. While some people think it would not a
necessory
absolutely essential
necessary
unnecessary
necessity
subject
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 and it is a waste of
time
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, but some are not.
This
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a
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an
 idea of the
Art
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subject
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.
Art
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 is a compulsory
subject
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 in the schools and everyone need to practise it. We have seen many toddlers starting their
writting
the act of creating written works
writing
 skills by sketching things on the paper or wall. From the upper
nercery
a child's room for a baby
nursery
 level their sketches will become nice
art
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,
letter
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 or a scenery they have seen.
it
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It
 is a
bigining
the event consisting of the start of something
beginning
 of the
Art
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.
writing
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Writing
 a good and smooth
letter
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also
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 an
Art
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. An example, Some kids are yet to write
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letter
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a letter
 properly, when they are in grade 1 or 2.
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Also some
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Also, some
 kids cannot draw a proper object they have seen in their real world
such
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 as table, chair, fish, moon, tree. When these
kid
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kids
 become younger, it will be a problem for the
society
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. They even
dont
do not
don't
 know how to draw
a
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an
 object or how to write a
letter
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 properly. I think
art
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subject
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 is
compulsery
required by rule
compulsory
 for everyone to raise their emotions in a written paper.
On the other hand
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,
Art
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 will not be a good
subject
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 to teach to the children. It is a waste of
time
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.
For example
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,
art
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 is
a
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an
 expensive
subject
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 to teach.
Art
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 need more
time
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 in the school
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time table
a schedule listing events and the times at which they will take place
timetable
. Now a days school allocate only 40
minute
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minutes
 per
subject
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.
Art
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cannot be teach
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cannot be taught
cannot teach
 within the specific
time
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 period. It has a
free style
a race (as in swimming) in which each contestant has a free choice of the style to use
freestyle
teching
the profession of a teacher
teaching
 mechanism to
influance
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
 students. We have seen many schools has allocated two
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time table
a schedule listing events and the times at which they will take place
timetable
 period to
Art
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subject
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.
Art
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 was not a
populer
regarded with great favor, approval, or affection especially by the general public
popular
subject
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 since old days. Only few people choose
art
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 as a
subject
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. People can suggest to schools, Only
selective
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select
 people to teach
Art
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. The
society
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need
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needs
 many
proffesionals
engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professionals
 who are based on the
Art
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. An example, interior designers, architects, civil engineers. They are important people
to
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in
of
 the
society
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. These people are raise form the
shcools
an educational institution
schools
school
scales
 who
influnce
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
influences
influenced
 from the
Art
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subject
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. They learn at least
basic consept
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the basic concept
basic concept
basic concepts
 of the
Art
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 and practise on it. In
conclution
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conciliation
consolation
,
Art
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 is an important
subject
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 to the schools. But we think
shcool
an educational institution
school
 need to allocate more
time
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 on it.
Art
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 will raise good people
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 the
society
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 as I explain in the above. Some people think
art
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 is a waste of
time
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. But it is not and it is a compulsory for the good
society
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.

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