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Digital communication technology, such as email, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connection between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answers and include examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The advent of modern
technology
bestoyed
present
bestowed
 us lots of
comunication
the activity of communicating; the activity of conveying information
communication
communications
 devices which
has enchance
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have enhanced
has enhanced
 communication and helps people to stay connected with their near and dear ones. In my opinion, I agree with the statement and there are
enourmous
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
enormous
 reasons to support my
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
 that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will discuss in subsequent paragraphs along with suitable examples.
To Commence with
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Commence with
benifits
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the benefits
benefits
 of digital communication
technology
 is that in
this
 materialistic world people are completely engrossed
into
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in
 their work so that they earn good amount of money to run their
livilehood
the financial means whereby one lives
livelihood
livelihoods
 smoothly, as a
consequency
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequence
 they do not have spare time to spend with others. Development of various social networking
websities
a computer connected to the internet that maintains a series of web pages on the World Wide Web
websites
website
such
 as
facebook
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Facebook
,
whatsapp
 extra which helps people to get knowledge about their near ones what are they doing in their lives in just few seconds due to high connectivity of
internet
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the internet
.
For instance
,
recent survey
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a recent survey
 conducted by The Tribune newspaper that modern
technology
 offers video call
facalities
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
faculties
 in various
application
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applications
 which helps to reduce the
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
cost
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costs
 of
travlers
a person who changes location
travellers
 in recent few years
becasuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 they now do their work online effectively.
However
,
this
phenemonen
any state or process known through the senses rather than by intuition or reasoning
phenomenon
also
 leads some negative trend
such
 as it tends to reduce the physical
activites
any specific behavior
activities
 of people. Nowadays, most of youngsters spend
number
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a number
 of hours on these websites which not only effect on their
health but
Accept comma addition
health, but
also
 shrink their social network
becasue
for the reason that; on account of
because
 they do not want to interact with others in
personal
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person
.
Moreover
, chances of
fraudmental
activites
any specific behavior
activities
has been increased
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have been increased
 due to modern
technology
, nowadays we are flooded with numerous emails which
attarct
direct toward itself or oneself by means of some psychological power or physical attributes
attract
 people by offering them different features. Sometimes
this
emails
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email
are
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is
from
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for
 hackers to trap the customers in various hostile issues.
For example
, a
recently
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recent
 article in
newspaper
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a newspaper
the newspaper
shows
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has shown
 that how millions of dollars were theft by one hacker who sent lottery mail to people and
get traps some
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get trapped in some
get trapped some
 of them and get detail of their personal bank accounts. To conclude, modern
technology
 gave us
beautiful gift
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a beautiful gift
 by offering various communication applications which made our life
more easier
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easier
 and
convienent
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 as
comapre
examine and note the similarities or differences of
compare
 to
premitive
belonging to an early stage of technical development; characterized by simplicity and (often) crudeness
primitive
 era,
although
 using
such
 things in
approiate manner
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an apparent manner
apparent manner
the apparent manner
 should be insured by
people
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the people
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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