We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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be only helped

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only be helped

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and they can not care everyone in the

world

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believe

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believe

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the positive effects of helping everyone in the

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the disadvantages of people who are not aware about helping other countries, if they need help

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it makes our universal to separate and divide into poor and rich countries

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a bad feeling

like hate and anger towards people who not care

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May lead to

happen wars

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happen, wars

and crimes and people is dead because hungry or any hazardous effect

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the earth. I confer with citizen who like to give others in the

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, there are a lot of positive points regarding

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these thoughts

this thought

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the whole

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will be cooperative and strong with exceptional and outstanding concepts

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region

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religious

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area or family

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the individual

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in humility societies who put money to poor cities or if any city had

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a disaster

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if you have any abilities to treat

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to have the peace in all earth

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good. Feeling and helping persons have positive issues and if not concerned about others in the earth outside your region has reversible effect.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

309 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

global interconnectivity
international cooperation
ethics
moral obligation
geographical borders
diplomatic relations
economic stability
global security
resource allocation
expertise
international aid
dependency and development
sustainable solutions
local and global initiatives
community resilience

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