We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#world #communities #countries

Some people believe that they should

be only helped

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only be helped

with their region countries

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and they can not care everyone in the

world

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I strongly disagree with

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this

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I will illustrate the negative effects of

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then

the positive effects of helping everyone in the

world

and the

last

what can we do to care other.

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the disadvantages of people who are not aware about helping other countries, if they need help

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it makes our universal to separate and divide into poor and rich countries

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Also, it

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will

provide

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a bad feeling

like hate and anger towards people who not care

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May lead to

happen wars

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happen, wars

and crimes and people is dead because hungry or any hazardous effect

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the earth. I confer with citizen who like to give others in the

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overall

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, there are a lot of positive points regarding

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these thoughts

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the whole

world

will be cooperative and strong with exceptional and outstanding concepts

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there will be no different layers between each

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region

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religious

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area or family

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Our spirit is full of delight and throw out any bad ideas about

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the individual

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pray

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good. Feeling and helping persons have positive issues and if not concerned about others in the earth outside your region has reversible effect.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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