We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that they should
be only helped
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only be helped
with their region countries
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and they can not care everyone in the
world
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I strongly disagree with
this
believe
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In
this
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I will illustrate the negative effects of
this
believe
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then
the positive effects of helping everyone in the
world
and the
last
what can we do to care other.
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the disadvantages of people who are not aware about helping other countries, if they need help
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it makes our universal to separate and divide into poor and rich countries
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Also it
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wil
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will
provide
bad feeling
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a bad feeling
like hate and anger towards people who not care
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May lead to
happen wars
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happen, wars
and crimes and people is dead because hungry or any hazardous effect
in
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on
the earth. I confer with citizen who like to give others in the
world
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overall
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Overall
, there are a lot of positive points regarding
this thoughts
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these thoughts
this thought
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First
the whole
world
will be cooperative and strong with exceptional and outstanding concepts
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Then
there will be no different layers between each
regions
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region
.You like other because he is human and don't look for their skin
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colour
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religious
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area or family
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Our spirit is full of delight and throw out any bad ideas about
individual
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the individual
individuals
. But how can we help human
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We can
sharing
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share
in humility societies who put money to poor cities or if any city had
disaster
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a disaster
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if you have any abilities to treat
illness you
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illness, you
can transfer to
this
location or you can write in
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a magazine
the magazine
or social networks about their problems and ask others to support
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pray
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Pray
to have the peace in all earth
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In overall
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good. Feeling and helping persons have positive issues and if not concerned about others in the earth outside your region has reversible effect.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global interconnectivity
  • international cooperation
  • ethics
  • moral obligation
  • geographical borders
  • diplomatic relations
  • economic stability
  • global security
  • resource allocation
  • expertise
  • international aid
  • dependency and development
  • sustainable solutions
  • local and global initiatives
  • community resilience
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