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We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#world #communities #countries
Some people believe that they should
be only helped
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only be helped
 with their region countries
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and they can not care everyone in the
world
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 I strongly disagree with
this
 believe
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 In
this
assay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 I will illustrate the negative effects of
this
 believe
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then
 the positive effects of helping everyone in the
world
 and the
last
 what can we do to care other.
First
 the disadvantages of people who are not aware about helping other countries, if they need help
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 it makes our universal to separate and divide into poor and rich countries
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Also it
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Also, it
wil
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 provide
bad feeling
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a bad feeling
 like hate and anger towards people who not care
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 May lead to
happen wars
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happen, wars
 and crimes and people is dead because hungry or any hazardous effect
in
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on
 the earth. I confer with citizen who like to give others in the
world
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overall
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Overall
, there are a lot of positive points regarding
this thoughts
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these thoughts
this thought
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First
 the whole
world
 will be cooperative and strong with exceptional and outstanding concepts
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Then
 there will be no different layers between each
regions
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region
.You like other because he is human and don't look for their skin
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
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religious
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area or family
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 Our spirit is full of delight and throw out any bad ideas about
individual
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the individual
individuals
. But how can we help human
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?!
 We can
sharing
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share
 in humility societies who put money to poor cities or if any city had
disaster
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a disaster
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if you have any abilities to treat
illness you
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illness, you
 can transfer to
this
 location or you can write in
magazine
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a magazine
the magazine
 or social networks about their problems and ask others to support
Finally
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pray
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Pray
 to have the peace in all earth
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 In overall
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 good. Feeling and helping persons have positive issues and if not concerned about others in the earth outside your region has reversible effect.
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