These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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The
world
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is constantly changing, with
this
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change the use of the
internet
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and mobile devices have become a great part of our lives in terms of social interactions and relations. Though, it has its own merits and de-merits. I believe there are more advantages to it than disadvantages.
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with,
internet
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and mobile phones have become so common in today's
world
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that it seems quite impossible to live without it. The
internet
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and mobile phones have brought people together in ways which we couldn't have imagined years ago. The
internet
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is like a portal through which people can connect with one another regardless of the distance. It enabled friends and family members living in different parts of the
world
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to connect with ease. With the help of
internet
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and mobile phones, people from different backgrounds and cultures are able to share their thoughts and views through various social media platforms and connect with similar people.
For example
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: a person on
Youtube
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YouTube
named
pewdiepie
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gained popularity and became famous through his
Youtube
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YouTube
channel and
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was possible only because of the
internet
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.
However
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, it can prove to be very dangerous and lethal when exploited. Nowadays,
people especially
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people, especially
the young generation is spending most of their time online rather than indulging in physical activities. The excessive use of mobile phones is
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affecting the health of the people and making them anti-social in the physical
world
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. People often fall victim to scams and other traps used by hackers to steal money, private data and other personal information. To conclude, both the
internet
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and mobile devices have made our lives easier. But if we don't exercise caution and limit the daily usage, it can prove to be dangerous. In my opinion, I believe it has more positives than negatives.
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