Nowadays schools should not use textbooks because children get bored with books. Using games, computers and TV is a better way to give them new information and knowledge. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays
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some people say that schools should
replaced
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replace
the books by electronic gadgets in school for better
study
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I personally in some extent to disagree with
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statement. As I think there should be a
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methods. To commence with the fever of books, a
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of greater importance or stature or rank
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benefit is that books are easy to
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afford
, due to its low cost as not everyone can buy electronic gadgets
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So at that time books are the best way to
study
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. Apart from
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, sometimes children can misuse the technical methods as the might tend to see wrong Channels which lead them to illegal activities
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as crime
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drug addiction and so on
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The
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
factor is that books are
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an
active way of
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for instance
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, to understand a
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student
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the student
have to do fully concentrate on the topic
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in a result it improves their cognitive abilities.
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but not least
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books
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book's
books'
strength the
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Imaginary
power of a child
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to illustrate.
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children
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have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
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to image the topic in his mind
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However
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, on the other side
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technical gadgets
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have some benefits.
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Firstly by
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learning
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audio visual aids
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one can remember for
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a long time
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As colourful images and sounds get
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the most attention
of the learner.
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this
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way is
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the easiest
method to learn something,
for example
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to learn the process of a tree to maturity from a seed by coloured picture is as compared to go through the reading in a book
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To sum up, I think
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books should
alelways
at all times; all the time and on every occasion
always
be remained
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in
the
study
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and at
same time
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the same time
some modern tools can be used in certain limit.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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