due to development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Supermarkets are huge and they have grown very fast in some countries. Local
business
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are not be
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is not being
able to compete
this
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multinational
business
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chains
Suggestion
chain
. Some people think local community going to be dead due to closure of local
business
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. I partially agree for
this
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statement. Supermarkets follow strong
business
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methods and marketing strategies to attract people.
Although
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they use promotion, But local
business
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are not. In
example
Suggestion
an example
, When
supermarket
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a supermarket
sell
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sells
product
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a product
with law margin cost, local
businesess
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
businesses
business
are unable to compete that cost. Even they use strategies to attract people with tv commercials and
news paper
a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements
newspaper
advartiesment
a public promotion of some product or service
advertisement
, As far as
poeple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
love promotion shopping. But
reality
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the reality
of
this
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promotion is different. Due to
above reasons
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the above reasons
, Local
business
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are going
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is going
down and low crowd will attract to them. When
this
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business
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are going
Suggestion
is going
down means, Money will not be
circulate
Suggestion
circulated
circulating
among local communities.
On the other hand
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, Large supermarket chain buy their product from local communities.
They
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Their
visit to local farms and food stores to buy good quality product. Some supermarkets
are lease
Suggestion
are leasing
their land and equipment to local farmers to farm and
then
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buy their
harvast
gather, as of natural products
harvest
harvests
heaviest
.
This
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is very helpful to local communities and consumers. When we think of both
side
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sides
, it is a very good
improvment
a change for the better; progress in development
improvement
of
businesess
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the business
business
businesses
. I think government should regulate these marketing
method
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methods
and mechanism to circulate money among local communities. In conclusion, Supermarket
business
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are
Suggestion
is
strong in most of the counties and they helpful to raise local farming industry and local
business
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. But I think government
involvment
the act of sharing in the activities of a group
involvement
is compulsory to secure supermarket and local communities. Both are important to step up the country.

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