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Should government make decisions about people's lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?

#government #decisions #people #lifestyle
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Nowadays, since we are living in a
countries
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country
, which are ruled by authorized people, most of the decisions, regardless of the life area, are made by them.
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more and more people opine that it is their democratic right, which enables them to make decisions
aout
(of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct
about
 their lifestyles.
That is
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 why in
this
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 essay I am going to provide several arguments in
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
 of
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 statement.
To begin
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 with, since the government's main task is to
workfor
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work for
 the
wellfare
governmental provision of economic assistance to persons in need
welfare
 of the population, politicians should take into consideration people's opinions and demands, before taking important decisions. In
this
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 way
peopleVs
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people's
 complaint will be satisfied and living standards will sour significantly.
For instance
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if the government
ask
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asks
 people how
muchshould
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much should
 cost public transport tickets, people will suggest a price
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appropriate for
thei
definite article
the
their
this
 earnings.
Secondly
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, if local councils enable citizens to determine how many recycling
beans
a container; usually has a lid
bins
 should be in a neighbourhood, recycling will become more popular with people. The reason is that by having more places to recycle, city dwellers will be more motivated to
continuone
continue a certain state, condition, or activity
continue
 doing so and in
this
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 way they will be part of the solution to the urging problem about garbage disposal.
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it is important to point out one bottleneck of people making decisions about their
lifestylesinsted
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 of
localcouncils
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local councils
. Because
governemnt's
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government
governments
government's
 workers are well-educated in specific areas, connected to citizen's lifestyle, they are more likely to make a better and smarter decision.
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forbidding the sale of alcohol and cigarettes to juveniles is important restriction, regarding the health of youngsters. To conclude, I believe that even though the government of a country is enabled to make important decisions about the way of living of the whole nation, citizens should be given the chance to use their
democratir
characterized by or advocating or based upon the principles of democracy or social equality
democratic
 right and share their opinions.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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