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most people decided to have children at a later age than in the past.why?. do the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages ?

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In
modern era
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the modern era
, lots of people wanted to have children at
later
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a later age
age
 as
comapre
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compared
compare
 to primitive era. There are
enourmous
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
enormous
anonymous
 reasons
resposible
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
 for
this
 notion which have
number
Suggestion
a number
 of pros and cons.
However
,
advantages
Suggestion
the advantages
 of
this
 trend outweigh its disadvantages, which
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will discuss in subsequent paragraphs.
First
 and foremost benefit
derive
Suggestion
derived
is derived
 from
this
 phenomenon is that people are mature enough
at
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in
 later years of
age so
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age, so
 that they can easily handle the period of parenthood with their experience.
Moreover
, they are well settled
at
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in
this
age
 group
as a
result they
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result, they
 can up bring children in
good and postive enviroment
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the good and positive environment
good and positive enviroment
good and positive environment
good and postive environment
.
Finally
, there is more risk
for
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of
health
 to
became
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become
 a mother at
early
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an early age, which
an early age which
age
 which sometimes make some
health
 related issues. For
Instace
an occurrence of something
instance
installs
, as per a recent survey by
world
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the world health organisation
world health organisation
health
 orginastion in
asia
the nations of the Asian continent collectively
Asia
most number
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the most number
 of people in
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
 nations became parents at
early
Suggestion
an early age
early ages
age
, nearly 35 percent mothers face
health
 related issues after giving a birth to
child
Suggestion
a child
the child
children
.
However
, there are
enourmous
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
enormous
 disadvantages related to
this
 notion.
Firstly at
Accept comma addition
Firstly, at
 later
age
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • delaying parenthood
  • financial stability
  • career advancement
  • personal goals
  • higher education
  • fertility treatments
  • relationship stability
  • health care improvements
  • personal development
  • postponing children
  • achieve milestones
  • family planning
  • modern society
  • life expectancy
  • paternal and maternal age
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