most people decided to have children at a later age than in the past.why?. do the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages ?

In
modern era
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the modern era
, lots of people wanted to have children at
later
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a later age
age
as
comapre
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compared
compare
to primitive era. There are
enourmous
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
enormous
anonymous
reasons
resposible
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
for
this
notion which have
number
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a number
of pros and cons.
However
,
advantages
Suggestion
the advantages
of
this
trend outweigh its disadvantages, which
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will discuss in subsequent paragraphs.
First
and foremost benefit
derive
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derived
is derived
from
this
phenomenon is that people are mature enough
at
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in
later years of
age so
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age, so
that they can easily handle the period of parenthood with their experience.
Moreover
, they are well settled
at
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in
this
age
group
as a
result they
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result, they
can up bring children in
good and postive enviroment
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the good and positive environment
good and positive enviroment
good and positive environment
good and postive environment
.
Finally
, there is more risk
for
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of
health
to
became
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become
a mother at
early
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an early age, which
an early age which
age
which sometimes make some
health
related issues. For
Instace
an occurrence of something
instance
installs
, as per a recent survey by
world
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the world health organisation
world health organisation
health
orginastion in
asia
the nations of the Asian continent collectively
Asia
most number
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the most number
of people in
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
nations became parents at
early
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an early age
early ages
age
, nearly 35 percent mothers face
health
related issues after giving a birth to
child
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a child
the child
children
.
However
, there are
enourmous
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
enormous
disadvantages related to
this
notion.
Firstly at
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Firstly, at
later
age
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • delaying parenthood
  • financial stability
  • career advancement
  • personal goals
  • higher education
  • fertility treatments
  • relationship stability
  • health care improvements
  • personal development
  • postponing children
  • achieve milestones
  • family planning
  • modern society
  • life expectancy
  • paternal and maternal age
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