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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
Nowadays, students from either rich or poor family are willing to
extent
Suggestion
extend
 their level of education by continuing their study at any
university
 in their home country or
in abroad after
Suggestion
abroad after
 finishing high school.
However
, some people find it hard to reach those universities
that
is completely opposed
Suggestion
are completely opposed
 to my opinion. In
this
 essay, I am going
examine
Suggestion
to examine
 two reasons that students can access easily into the
university
.
First
, fully funded
scholarships
Suggestion
scholarship
 opportunity
are opened
Suggestion
is opened
 every year for students who want to continue their study abroad or in local
university
. It is
great chance
Suggestion
a great chance
 for students who are having financial problem could get their scholarship and study at their dream school.
Second
, as the infrastructure
are developed
Suggestion
is developed
 with the new building of roads where people live seems to be nearer from their
university
.
Thus
, students can reach school easily without any concerned or distance barriers. In conclusion, student in
this
 generation are more access easily to the
university
 than our parent’s age as a numerous scholarship opened available and the development of infrastructure
Thus
, students from poor and rich family can access into their dream
university
 easily.

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